Posts Tagged ‘journalism’


Too Many Words!

Monday, January 18th, 2010

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Just as I hit the “publish” button of my last post, this column was published in the Atlantic. The author, Michael Kinsley, says that most newspaper articles are too long. Those of us who are used to writing for the Internet know that you have to get to the point quickly, and kick to the curb all the rules you learned in journalism school (such as: use descriptive adjectives and action verbs, don’t repeat words in a paragraph, don’t use colloquial language). The article dissects sentence-paragraphs from the NYT and The Washington Post as examples. (Next week I am going to take apart the Atlantic whose writers could often use a stronger-willed editor.)

Use simple language, simple sentence structure, call a spade a spade, write it like you’d say it and remove every single unnecessary word.

Your reader is not a captive at the breakfast table or on the subway to work. He or she is only going to keep reading for a few more seconds, till someone walks into his office with a question or IM’s her a link to a cool YouTube video, or till his smart phone rings.

You Can Write Better than the New York Times

Tuesday, January 12th, 2010

After reading a sentence in yesterday’s New York Times, I realized that the venerable news organization might provide a fertile ground for examples of unintelligible writing.

So, for the next few weeks I will take examples from some of my favorite “heady,” “intellectual” information sources and show you how you could rewrite them so someone might actually understand them, and might even be persuaded by them. And, in marketing, isn’t it all about persuasion?

The sentence came from an article entitled: U.S. Saw a Path to Qaeda Chiefs Before Bombing, by Mark Mazzetti, in January 5’s New York Times. The opening of the article basically said that last week’s suicide bomber had been thought to be a promising informant for our government. So here it is:

American intelligence officials said Tuesday they had been so hopeful about what the Jordanian might deliver during a meeting with C.I.A. officials last Wednesday at a remote base in Khost that top officials at the agency and the White House had been informed that the gathering would take place.(more…)

Defining News from Different POVs

Wednesday, June 10th, 2009

The US media have long been criticized for taking a myopic view of world events.  Reporting became less insular following the events of 9/11.  But how and what US media choose to report still leaves foreign news organizations aghast.  For the most part, we don’t know what we’re missing; although the Internet does provide inquiring minds access to other news outlets.

I sometimes find it interesting to see how a major news event in the US is presented elsewhere.  So I was intrigued by a work I came across during a recent visit to the Metropolitan Museum of Art.

As part of “The Pictures Generation, 1974-1984” special exhibition (April 21-August 2, 2009), artist Sarah Charlesworth reproduced the front page from 45 newspapers across the globe on April 21, 1978.  All text other than that on the mast heads has been removed, leaving only the front page photos.

On this particular date, Italian Prime Minister Aldo Moro, who was being held in captivity by the Red Brigade, was pictured holding a newspaper in an effort to prove he was still alive following previous reports of his assassination.

Presenting only the front page photos eliminates any language barriers and allows Charlesworth to quickly convey the relative weight given the story around the world.  Check it out.